R.I.P

This is to my coz R.I.P, we will miss you. He committed suicide just on 3-4-2011

Death is what tares us apart,

When you don’t know where you are going after life,

It’s scary,

You never want to stray too far from the light,

Because you never know when your time will come,

So stay with the truth in life,

And your mind won’t be in the wrong place,

You will think of good and only good,

You will never have any thoughts,

I say to myself what I could have done to stop this,

I may never know,

All I have to worry about is that I keep family and friends close,

And to love on the lord,

Who gives us life

Author's Note

This is to my coz R.I.P, we will miss you.
He committed suicide just on 3-4-2011

Reviews

[freelancejouster]

this is so sobering. appreciative... ...i do like the ideas behind this. the meaning behind this. the truth and angst and pain behind this, slowly being revealed... it could just be presented a bit better... first line "tears" instead of "tares". if there was some kind of spacing, this might flow better. try grouping ideas. this could use some revision and organization. change words and phrases around because it's... well, it's a lumpy poem. and it's meant to be, i think, meant to stop people and make them work for the words.. but... there's a way to go about that. also, the word "lord" should be capitalized.

[Zachary_James]

I am sending you my condolences. I lost a firend a couplr years ago not to suicide though. But stil to this day i miss her so bad, Death can be sad at times but here's my advice to you, just hold your head high and think good thoughts and once again i am sorry for your loss.

[Coyote Poetry]

I'm sorry for your loss. Suicide leave many open questions. My two brothers committed suicide 22 years ago. I still wish to know why? I like the ending. We learn to be kinder when people fall who are close and we did not know their pain and suffering. A sad poem. Thank you for sharing. I hope all things are Ok with your family. I know it will be a hard time for many.
Coyote