You are Beautiful

When I seen you for the first time,

Your beauty struck me hard,

I’ve never saw someone as beautiful as you,

You eyes sparkle in the night sky,

Your hair flows with the slender wind,

Your smile shows what you are all about,

You are more beautiful than a beach,

On a early summer morning,

When the sun is coming up from a short peaceful night,

You are,

Beautiful..... 

Reviews

[HoorayForUnderdog]

Hi Matt,
Your poem is a lovely tribute. You have a true romantic and poetic spirit. I do have a few editing notes for you to consider:

1. typo line 1, "seen" should be "saw"
2. typo line 3, "saw" should be "seen"
3. I would like to see you stretch your poetic wings a bit. When you say her smile shows what she is all about -- I would like a visual of that -- does her smile radiate warmth like fresh towels right out of the dryer, does it shimmer like moonlight on fresh snowfall, does it deceive like sunshine on a frigid February morning?

[MandaBear]

very nice poem.

[diannesam]

I love this poem
Don't know if it was intentional, but 'seen' should be 'saw'
But I loved the expressions you used, this is a very nice poem