Actions Don't Hurt

You tell me off,

But I still want to say,

You are beautiful in every way,

My heart weeps for forgiveness,

Thoughts are not words,

However words are thoughts,

Everything I say and do is for you. 

Reviews

[.shalynn.009.]

I really liked this. It was an "aawww" moment there at the end. I liked the kind of loose rhyming scheme. It kind of mirrored the idea that these are the speaker's thoughts, which wouldn't be structured. I thought you could have connected the idea of thoughts in the last sentence, although I suppose the word "say" could be construed as his the speaker's thoughts, and how they are for the one he is speaking to, if connected to the line before. Overall, good job.

[Amanda Dawn Sanderson-G..]

This was a painful read... having love for someone that doesn't return your feelings. It hurts, but if you open your eyes and mind long enough to see between the lines, then you usually come to find out that your heart just played tricks on your head and you weren't really meant to be with this time you felt had been love. That is the thing with emotions... you have to truly understand yourself and your own heart, otherwise you may end up in love with someone that isn't right for you and in the long run... it just breaks your heart "My heart weeps for forgiveness"... or you ruin the relationship, praying for forgiveness for never receiving it. But usually things go wrong when it wasn't right in the first place... so don't let your heart regret something that may have never worked out, even if you didn't mean to wind up breaking your own heart.

[Coyote Poetry]

A poem with the twisted tale of love. Woman who push us away don't realize they make most men want them more. The complete poem was very good. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[howlfjdks]

I have felt this for someone before I understand this entirely.

[freelancejouster]

sweet and simple, this is a pretty little poem. The only rhyme is a little distracting, but, alas...

[Jessica Samuelsen]

good job.... tumultuous love... I do not miss those days. It's nice to see you work out your feelings in poetry.

[Sydney Evans]

This is realllllly cute (:
I love it.
Good job (:

[M.Babu]

The rhyme scheme although loose brought out the poignance in your words. I enjoyed how you phrased this. Good poem

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

This is definately a heart string jerker and very sweet. Great Job!

[Lindsey]

I really like youre writing a lot!

[MandaBear]

it was definatly an awww moment at the end. i really liked this one i think you are good writer