Thoughts

When I think of you,

I picture a beach,

Two sets of footprints,

Love that could have lasted,

You are the reason for my heartbeat

Reviews

[.shalynn.009.]

Very lovely and simple. From the context of line four, I'm guessing the love didn't last. If you wanted to further emphasize that, you could have the first four lines as their own stanza and have the fifth line a stanza in itself. Although, I do like that you used an odd number of lines, since an even number would have symbolized the fact that the two people were together and in harmony. The addition of the fifth line emphasizes their disconnect, and the fact that the speaker is no longer a part of the pair they made. Good poem, very sweet and sad.

[howlfjdks]

Precious but sad for we all want love for another to not end.

[Jessica Samuelsen]

I love the Beach..... You are such a romantic....... Good job in summing up this imagery in a few short lines.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. You said in all in so few words. Need two people and time to appreciate a beautiful day at the ocean. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

Great job this is one of my favorites

[Lindsey]

This is really cool!

[MandaBear]

awwww so awesome

[Sydney Evans]

aw, this is so sweet (:

[Elizebeth Brooks]

Very sweet. Very to the point, and heart felt.

Raven.