Dreams....

Four months ago, I laid my eyes on the most beautiful stunning personality, all around amazing girl I have ever talk to, and everyday that I can I fight for her affection. So here is a little poem.

Off and on but never faded

Is the feelings that I hold for you

Times seem too short when I'm in your presences

and when I'm not

It seems like ages

I long for the day that you and me are together

But all I can do now is wait for the perfect opportunity to show you that I'm true

When that day comes I will win you over

Everything else in my life will just fall into place

Just a simple dream that one day will hopefully come true 

Reviews

[spiritwind]

The elasticity of time! Isn't it a marvel??!!
There is a purity and a sweetness here
but the flow of poetry is missing for me...
Please read that final sentence out loud--doesn't your tongue trip and stumble?
You also wrote "But all I can do now is wait for the perfect opportunity to show you that I'm true"--why not SHOW the things you could do to prove you are true... poetry thrives on images and we readers love word pictures!
I like the sincerity of this love poem now build me some air castles!!

[Matthew Ryan Hardy]

I get what your saying fully. When I post writings on here, these are just written minutes before they are posted. Thanks

-Matthew Hardy-

[Saumya]

such a sweeeeeeeeeet short and lovely poem..!!!
well done..!!!
i hope your dreams to soon come true......!!!!
:)

[Natasha]

what a sweet little poem you have here, one thing was the scheme of the poem, it didnt flow quite well with the incredibly long sentence "But all I can do now is wait for the perfect opportunity to show you that I'm true" maybe somehow break that up so its a bit shorter and goes with the rest of the poem

[MandaBear]

So emotional and sweet. Whoever this girl is has a strong hold on your heart. I hope one day she will know how you feel and feel the same way. Great Job. Keep writing.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very hopeful poem. Good to have dream of love. I like the thoughts and the desire in the poem. I hope your dream come true. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote