Raining

I wrote this about the rain and remembering other rainy days.

It's raining outside,

I don't very much like it,

It's raining outside,

But it's better than more snow so I'll take it,

It's raining outside,

More like it's pouring,

It's raining outside,

And inside it's boring,

It's raining outside,

The clouds are dark and grey,

It's raining outside,

And the squirrels refuse to play,

It's raining outside,

The windows are starting to fog,

It's raining outside,

And I can see the bugs hiding under a log,

It's raining outside,

The vendors are closing their stalls for the day,

It's raining outside,

And the children are putting their toys away,

It's no longer raining outside,

The sun is beginning to shine again

It's no longer raining outside,

And there's a puddle with my name.

Reviews

[vincentbals]

Great flow Matt. Very funny poem to read. Thanks.

[The Wave]

nice.

it has good flow but i didn't see alot of originality. Add more imagery and mess around with words to manipulate their sound so you refrain from using typical rhyming words like cat, hat, rat, etc.

overall, it has potential, it did put a smile on my face at the end
Good job