Groping for Dreams

A broken heart,

A broken dream,

For some of us,

They are one,

Of the same thing,

An eye for an eye,

But who will see?

This work I do? These lights I breathe?

Is it fine? This loss of time,

This solitary thought,

This broken item bought,

A shattering of hopes,

Timeless in destiny’s spokes,

Bleeding dreams onto the ground, quickly they seethe,

Running away so hurriedly,

But I lunge, I pounce, I grasp, I grope,

I hold verily tight to these dreams, my hopes,

I never let go, although they flicker,

I try and I try for them and never let them slither,

I hold tight and I firmly believe,

That no one can stop me or take away my dreams.

Reviews

[NightsShade]

I really enjoying this writing but I have just one thing to point out. I didn't really understand this verse "But who will see? This work I do? These lights I breathe?" . I just was kinda confused on the "These lights I breathe" part. I had to read it over a few times to really understand it. To me it implied you were breathing lights... But maybe I'm just a little dense and can't see the creative aspect...
But anyways great write, I loved the struggle and the fight for your dreams, it's something that everyone has to do sometime.

[Aussie]

Fantastic topic! Never let go of your dreams(:
I really,really enjoyed this. Bravo.

[A]

Love this! I love how you talk about the struggle of accomplishing our dreams but it we try and try we can accomplish them. We just have to believe in ourselves. Great poem! Love the message! :)