1815

The Battle of Waterloo Recreated...

 They regicide, we campaign: blood, flesh and terror

 camouflage your eyes, afield from the world of error

 napoleon, ney: saints of death! are they near?

 give me truce, death, or mere freedom to fear!

 

 Unity undone, amity abstract, most glee apart 

 those days of comity, will it ever again start?

 mock the genre of rats, a comrade to horrors

 man is the prey and human beasts predators.

 Came the French army, for more power, more enmity

 do I have the fate, to fight, to exist, or am I to infinity

 my heart bled for her, hex the clamoring recruitment

 forced to leave my love, coerced to join the regiment.

 Every me in the Prussians, prayed, every big and small

 petitioned god, a communal dream, the napoleon fall

 Our women awaited blood, every news from war

 We'll fight, for them, for life, but never for honor or star.

                                                                     THE END

Historical Note: 

The Battle of Waterloo takes place near the Waterloo, Belgium on June 18, 1815. In this battle, the forces of the French Empire under the leadership of Michael Ney and Napoleon Bonaparte were defeated by the Seventh Coalition and a Prussian Army, which was commanded by Gebhard Von Blucher. The Battle of Waterloo puts an end to the tyrant rule of Napoleon as the emperor of France. (From Google)

Author's Note

Emotional side of a conscripted man....

Reviews

[Emily Quinn]

This is the kind of writing I deeply enjoy and am always searching to find. It's not a mere poem of entertainment purposes or only to express, it is about real issues, real world battles of various kinds (dictatorship being one of them) and that is what I absolutely love.

Now, moving onto the writing itself. The way you wote each line with kind of two different subjects- almost seeming to be 2 seperate lines in themselves separated by one form of punctuation or another- was a great was to make the poem more impactful. The words feels like hard, quick punches as you read due to these quick stops. You had great imagery and emotion; I couldn't help but feel blood rush to my cheeks with anger...and then you mention "she" which suddenly turns the poem personal and my mood changed to grief and compassion. For me, thats a good indication of a well written peice of literature.

I would be intested in reading more writing if you choose to add more to the site.

[deeps]

This is amazing!! I like writes that people take time with I can tell that this did. Very prolific and well written. Perfect flow and rhyme scheme.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

you draw the reader right into the human historical center ~ quite engaging and attention grabbing~

[Shivi]

These are my fav :

petitioned god, a communal dream, the napoleon fall
Our women awaited blood, every news from war
We'll fight, for them, for life, but never for honor or star.

It is nice that you gave a bckground of the war, otherwise would've been tough to feel it :).

[Kool-Aide]

im diggin it, dat waz pretty hot how u tied history into a poem. nice

[Brad]

you've described the blood of battle well here, you've got a knack for putting your reader right in the middle of your writes

[NovaKai]

This is great. Very touching actually :)

[nono]

Oh lovely just fantastic I love it these words are of a true poet. Nicely done! And I love how you put some historical moments into it now that's something I like reading about! Nice job history should always be remember and what you did was honor it. All I can do is say that this poem is worth a standing ovation!

[SparrowPoet]

This is a very powerful poem! I like the fact that you're actually engaging with history - to a lot of people history is like a massive, unchangeable mural that has little impact on their lives (or so they think!)

My favourite line is "give me truce, death, or mere freedom to fear". I'm sure something like this goes through the mind of every soldier in that kind of situation. The line exemplifies what poetry is about - distilling big and complex ideas or sentiments into a concise expression. Nice work.

[Leanne Conway]

Very nice. I like it.

[Jess Quna]

Don't shoot me for what I'm about to say and read everything,
I'm not critisizing you (rather myself)

I have to admit that when I read it the first time,
I had no idea what it was about.
I didn't know if it were some random thoughts and sentences all mixed together,
or something deeper.
When I reread it AFTER reading the explanation that it was about Napoleon,
I did understand more or less what you were saying
so it became more interesting.
The reason I probably didn't realize what it was about ,was because I don't know enough about this to make the connection.

Now the positive stuff:
I think it's written in a great style,
I like it when sentences are 'broken' like someone stated.
It gives you time to slow down and notice the thoughts behind it.

Greetings

Sarah