Uniform

A young boy who has a dream of being a soldier.

Everyday after school, a young boy would rush home and slam his bedroom door closed. In his closet, neatly hung, is a soldier uniform. Perfectly tailored to fit such a small figure. He traces the carefully sewn on flag with his fingertips, hoping that one day he will wear this to serve his country just like his Father. With a wide grin, he slides one arm threw the sleeve. *click* The helmet strap snaps shut and he's off to play Army Men. His dreams of being a soldier will never come true, the reason is that he has been diagnosed with type one diabetes. I know this because he's my brother; and everyday he asks me if I think he will be a great cadet. My answer following is always "Yes of course." I can't tell him the truth, how would he react?

He'll find out one day on his own and maybe thats for the better. Maybe his dreams would shift direction and forget about the days he played 'Good guy Bad guy' for hours. The days he cuddled up on the couch watching Enemy at the Gates. (Movie about WW2)

Author's Note

I don't know.. I got bored so I wrote a short little paragraph. Criticism is appreciated. Thank you.

Reviews

[Cafe Reader]

Wow, that was very touching.

[GTVile]

I like it. Though... I can admit I'm partial to it for obvious reasons. There are plenty of other ways he can serve. The Army is in desperate need of capable leaders in and out of uniform. Its YOUR duty to keep him motivated!

The write was good. You set up the setting very well. You perhaps could have made it a bit longer to preserve the mystery of it. You let the cat out of the bag really early by saying that its your brother. Beyond that, its a great piece and you are doing a credit to yourself and him.

[Massey]

Well all we can do is hope. Thank you all

[Zeek4]

With the advances they are making in medical science there is a good chance they will come up with a cure for diabetes. I think your little brother should be allowed to keep his dream alive for now. Stay warm Massey

[Wolfwind Words]

The vision brought across is a enduring and powerful one. Filled with the dreams of one and the silent compassion of the older other. There were a place that could use a comma that I noticed. (First line "school, a young boy...")
I think over all this paragraph could be expanded to show more detail and introspection on the older siblings part. But as it stands, it captures the heart of the reader and makes us think about life.

Great Reflective Ink!