Unrestrained

Love hurts

Your lips strip the flesh from my neck

Your fingers intertwined with mine, affectionately wringing them a lifeless blue

Your lingering gaze tears its way through my matted fur, leaving me shamefully exposed

Your forked tongue delicately flays my withered bones

I lay bleeding, bruised, and blistered, thankful for the pain that frantically proclaims “this is real”

Reviews

[Patricia Williams]

Pain and love are two subjects that, while opposites, cross paths much too often. You capture the marriage of pain and pleasure that is love very beautifully.

I also really like the length of it. I love poetry because it is like prose but with almost everything stripped away, so that all that is left are raw, real, emotions. It's short, but the imagery more than makes up for what it appears to be lacking in length.

Speaking of imagery, it is fantastic! It just works so beautifully with the free-verse. :)

Keep up the good work,
xPatricia

[Ink Seductress]

Wow, this was something different entirely. And the metaphors portrayed something so vivid in my head. I felt as if I could reach out and touch the image. It was a different experience entirely, I loved it!
Great write.

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Brilliant piece of writing Mason...the love and lust so desired and then ending with a pain is heartfelt and the way you expressed it is a work of art....loved this a loootttt...

[Rana]

Totally effectual and striking, an admirable piece of work. Despite being free verse its got a wonderful pattern. Very unique; theres such skill in the depiction of hurt coming out of something so natural; love is a witch and unexpectedly too. Got me wishing this was of a greater length..

[Lilly]

I love the use of metaphors in your poem and how well the title is connected with the poem.
I like how in the beginning of each sentence you describe the way you thought about her or about the love you shared and at the end of the sentence describing what really went down.
The rhythm in the last line of the poem is nicely wrote.
Great poem 

[Eliza Mae]

This is a brilliant poem.

I love how you started each line with something that seems desirable and ended with obvious pain.

Great contrast here.. Bravo, Mason!