Oh this makes me sad as someone i love so much died without warning in bed ... went to sleep and didn't wake..
These questions are valid we all wonder about this .. and what kind of legacy we have left or not left as the case may be.. This is a soul searching poem so well written...
Oh this makes me sad as someone i love so much died without warning in bed ... went to sleep and didn't wake..
These questions are valid we all wonder about this .. and what kind of legacy we have left or not left as the case may be.. This is a soul searching poem so well written...
Ah! Yay, thank you Mary. That's what I was going on about at the end there. Need to make my existence known. So I write and put myself into my writing. I wonder if anyone caught that new double meaning of the word "I," in the last line of the third stanza; not just my body, but my soul and all my work that has or has not been completed. I need to leave something behind that proves my existence, and, if possible, to make a name for myself.
Im usually not that big a fan of poetry but I truely Love this i can actually identify it it seems like this poem is whats playing in my head every moment im writing.
I considered giving it a light, happy ending, but it felt better to end on that last line. Nothing else came to mind. I also wanted to allow the reader room to make their own happiness from this otherwise bleak piece, because they need to be able to have that ability.
This poem got me to think about that same question. It's weird to contemplate what kind of legacy we will leave behind (or lack thereof). I especially liked the two stanzas in the middle that start with the "I would..." I found those to be beautiful. Great poem.
... very deep and intense existential questions ... a brutally introspective verse ... we wonder ... we ask ... we think aloud ... not all answers are easy to find ... some surprise us and some don't ... but at the end of such forthright introspection ... some clarity of thought is achieved and some ideas come to the fore ... and often creative people build on them and arrive at a reason for existence ... this is beautifully written ... it's very powerful and thought-provoking ... and for me as a reader ... it's not just bleak for it does steer my mind towards constructive thought ...
I like it I also think about what would happen if i died it is a really hard topic for people to think about but I think you express your thought perfectly