I fell in Love

I fell in Love

A Poem by Maskedthoughts
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A mix of the way my body and my mind fell in love.

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I fell in love with your rough voice in the morning light-

I fell in love with the way you drive my body in the heavy night.

 ---I fell in love with your stories, the way you ease my worries. 


My mind fell in love with your brain, my soul only responds to your flame, my body is a wild beast that fights to be tame, a slave that only you can claim. 

 ---I fell in love with the way you whisper my name. You are the         only one who can keep me sane. 


I fell in love, oh did I ever. Now darling make the skies explode until we are drenched in the rain of our love. 


 

© 2015 Maskedthoughts


Author's Note

Maskedthoughts
I'm not 100% satisfied with the flow/structure, it's still a work in progress.

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I felt the love in this piece complete admiration and devotion in a sense for the person physically and mentally.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I see what you mean with the structure MT, the words are fine I feel but the bit in the middle - namely, 'the middle' - could be centre jusftified maybe but remain where it is
eg "My mind fell in love with your brain, my soul only responds to your flame, my body is a wild beast that fights to be tame, a slave that only you can claim. " - could become

My mind fell in love with your brain
my soul only responds to your flame
my body is a wild beast that fights to be tame
a slave that only you can claim.

anyway - the words are fab, I like the whole passion and the love in this.
:)

ps this text box wont allow centre justifying but you get the idea... :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Maskedthoughts

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
Fantastic! I am so happy for you! This piece screams love for sure, nice work.
I have one that will add to your love spell called so special, I think you will enjoy it.
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!


Posted 9 Years Ago


Maskedthoughts

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much! And I'll check it out!

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Added on February 20, 2015
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