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A face that is bathed in tears

Is a face nobody wants to greet 

Eyes that are screaming in pain

Are eyes nobody wants to see

Lips which bear witness to the truth

Are lips nobody wants to kiss

A heart which is slowly sinking

Is a heart nobody wants to rescue

A mind which is full of wisdom

Is a mind none wish to seek.

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[M]

I like the rhythm of the poem a lot and think the images used are very evocative. I would've liked to see a better description of the "eyes that are screaming in pain" since "screaming in pain" actually is a bit nonspecific and makes the image a bit more abstract.

I would say the same about "lips that bear witness to the truth". It's a challenge but using images and experiences that convey these ideas without saying them explicitly sometimes gets the sentiment of the poem across more poignantly to the reader.

I would have also liked there to be more to the poem at the end, perhaps something that gives a sense of finishing to the speaker's musings. :D

[$êlvån]

True one:)

[Honey54]

omg you captured so much in this piece...I love the line "


Lips which bear witness to the truth

Are lips nobody wants to kiss" Honesty is hard to bare...AMAZING JOB

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Simple and perfect, reads easily and without confusion!

[Wendy Seames Garner]

I would respond.

[Distant horizons]

beautifully written

[luna11]

Such a lovely poem.
"A mind which is full of wisdom/Is a mind none wish to seek."
Those are my favourite two lines because they made me think hard.
Well done
X

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

so true and nicely written maryam.
keep it up.......
"who knows, for whom does a flower bloom?
But everyone knows, yet a flower blooms regardless of worldly appreciation "aZ.