Tornado

It's a short poem written with a view of how things stand and how we should respond to face a challenge in life.

You Came Like an Oasis
Cooling My Desert of Thoughts
Went Away with a Blink of an Eye
Like a Tornado, Devastating My Emotions

Leaves are Gone, and
You Don't Look that Green
But the Tree is Still Alive
Waiting for the Smell of Fresh Rain

Reviews

[NFA]

Loved this poem, Mary. I love how you used weather cycles as a metaphor for life's occurrences. The smell of fresh rain comes to anoint the soul and baptize it, free of whatever has just ailed you, only for life to then throw something else at you, and the rain is needed again once more.

[Mary Jain]

Thank you and I'm happy to know that my words pleased the poem lover in you.

[jennifer little]

wow great write good flow nice short sweet poem wonderfully said keep up the good work

[Mary Jain]

Thank you Jennie :)

[jennifer little]

ur welcome

[Ada]

Nice metaphor using the phenomena of the natural word as a comparison for how your relationship went. Ones that start red hot sometimes burn out the light quickly.

[Mary Jain]

Thanks for reading and commenting your views on it. My advise always to all remains same: Be Hopeful.

[Ascian]

This is a nice poem. The first stanza really sticks with me. It's amazing how quickly a tornado can dissipate and people too.

[Mary Jain]

Thanks for reading my poem, glad you liked it. It happens in the life of every people, but the point is that we should hope for the best to come our way.

[Gideon X. A. Elson]

Good job with your use of adjective here. Hard to find poem that are so descriptive and bring forth such imagery, and yet it remains so succinct. Bravo

[Mary Jain]

Hi, Thanks for reading and giving your words about my work here.

[ZeppoZealand]

Too good to read. I am still trying to improve my poem writing. So nicely written.

[Mary Jain]

Hi, I'm happy to know that you liked it.
Don't hesitate, write your lines and share it with us.
Keep writing and keep improving :)

[Chris Shaw]

A lovely piece of descriptive writing. Resilience is what is needed when facing challenges. Hello Mary, pleased to meet you.

Chris

[Mary Jain]

Hi Chris,
My pleasure to have a review from you here. You guys are what helping us to keep going.

[Coyote Poetry]

Dear Mary, very nice use of words. When a tornado hits us. We never forget the storm.
"Leaves are Gone, and
You Don't Look that Green
But the Tree is Still Alive
Waiting for the Smell of Fresh Rain"
I liked the above lines. Perfect use of description. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Mary Jain]

Thanks a lot for your encouraging words :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome, dear Mary.