Wavering love

To have a friend who can not proudly introduce you to his friends

His love blooms like a splendid
sun-kissed lily behind
closed doors....
Around friends-
it withers like the setting sun
settling into dusk.

Author's Note

Thank you:-)

Reviews

[Willard Wells]

A love that must be reviewed. Intimidated by friends or ashamed of his love. To different reasons, but I have not walked in his shoes. Well done.

A lover because he's comfortable with you behind closed doors, but fear overpowers in the real world. Very likely a man with empathy and a good heart. Or a jerk, who should get kicked to the curb real soon. hahaha

[Mary Helda]

hahahaha...definately the latter and he is going to be kicked to the curb real soo..still looking for the courage. .thank you sir.:-)

[Willard Wells]

Very little courage needed. I mean apparently he is not a man, treating you with no respect. Just ease on down the road and be busy a lot. :)

[Mary Helda]

I am doing exactly that..and each day goes by,i realize that the friendship is wrong despite loving him(best friend) so much... i am the one who is investimg in everything,always been there for him

[Érenn]

Short yet full of meaning. It truly is a wonderful poem. ^^

[Carolynn]

Oh I have gone through something similar with someone years ago. Kicking to the curb is a definite must :) Happiness awaits just around the corner :) Well done with this one Mary!

[Mary Helda]

Thank you my dear friend

[andrew mitchell]

Interesting poem One can either be unsure or at unease to advertise of one he is in love with or he is too embarrassed to tell which is rather insulting as he has no real investment in the relationship. All rather sad!!

[Mary Helda]

Yes,you are definately right about that...thank you so much dear poet

[Sami Khalil]

No one should be ashamed of true love and it can't be hidden for long. True things have to reveal themselves in due time. All other false ones hide behind masquerades and false reasons. An excellent penning....:))

[Mary Helda]

Well,thank you so much sir:-)...i really do appreciate it

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome generousgenerously .....:))))))

[Mary Helda]

hehehehehee:-)

[Sami Khalil]

:)......................

[-inactive now-]

Nice wording and form, the alliteration in that last line works well.
And if this is based on a real man he is a jerk.
Nice poem :)

[Mary Helda]

hahaha..thank you my friend

[Mary Helda]

hahaha..thank you my friend

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i saw what Willard did...someone who is ashamed of his love when in public...that is so sad...

it is good in a relationship to love spending time just with each other, but also good when we can be a couple around other people...
j.

[Mary Helda]

Thank you sir:-)...i really do appreciate it

[Great Aunt Astri]

Love the alliteration 'setting sun settling'

[Mary Helda]

Why,thank you...

[Deanna M.]

Even though this poem is short it has so many things. A friend is supposed to be proud to call you a friend and to introduce you as his friend. For them not to do that is painful. Well written, and good job!!

[Mary Helda]

Thank you:-) and yes,you are right about that

[Mister T.]

After some re-reading, I finally found out what the meaning of these short but powerful sentences was. I'm proud of myself - and proud of you ;)
First of all, I'll take a look at the poem itself. One thing became clear to me: this is a VERY carefully written and impressive, short poem. A beautiful way of describing the situation, good job on that! Keep writing, that's and order, not an advise ;)
Secondly, I get the situation you're in at the moment. I'm not going to explain why I think it's real love or not, that's up to you, I cannot determine this with the information given. But one thing I know for sure: love should be unconditional. Whether other people like it or not, whether other people say you're boyfriend's a jerk, whether his friends like you or not. He should've realized that right away.
And lastly, stay strong, stick to your heart and do what you think is the right thing to do. Show the world your courage, show them your strength, show them your ability to change things in life.

[Mary Helda]

Oh dear,thank you so much..you put a smile on my face..and yes sir,i will keep writing..i am proud of you too.:-)..thank you:-)

[Mister T.]

I guessed you needed a smile, so there you go ;)

[Mary Helda]

you are so sweet and kind..thanks:-)

[Coyote Poetry]

You had said a lot in the short poem. Hiding a friend in darkness is wrong. Not truly a real friend would do. Thank you Mary for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mary Helda]

Thank you so much...i really do appreciate it:-)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Mary.