Death broke my heart twice

the nightmare that has kept me awake for days

Help!
Aloud came the yelp
Ripping through me like pieces of glass
I could see her weary face void of delight
A restless broken soul wilting to the colour of night
Frantically moving her hands in the filthy muddy river as she drifted away into nothingness
Clearly depriving us of togetherness
Suddenly i awoke to the bloodcurdling sound of an owl
Tears cascading down my cheeks
With only the darkness to hold me
And the loneliness to wipe away my tears
Are you still wondering around?
Did you go to heaven?
I pray you see the light,mommy

Reviews

[A.marie.speaks]

I think death continously breaks our hearts. Each time you think it may be the last but some dream, some memory will surface and the heart shatters again. I hope to god, if there is one, that my heart never becomes too hard to break again because that pain is love, that's all, beautiful love in a different form.. no one can help to wonder if they are safe or gone.. in a heaven somewhere or reincarnated and anew.. but your poem reflects what we all feel and fear after we lose someone, thanks for sharing.

[Mary Helda]

I hope so too..thank you for reading and reviewing..i really appreciate it:-)

[V]

I like the depth of the content. Even though your lines seem to be crafted effortless, they convey a deeper meaning.

[Mary Helda]

Thank you so much

[V]

You're welcome.

[Gee]

I think we've all been there.Not being a religious type I look forward to a warm send off then ashes to the winds.Hopefully my own daughter will be at peace with my passing.Really liked this Mary.

[Mary Helda]

Thank you very much...i hope so too

[Bear]

Nice flow and a good show of your descriptive talents, the last line give's it the feel of a bedtime prayer. A well told story masterfully done, I give it four out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Mary Helda]

Ohhh..thank you so much:-)

[CiNtsaLis]

heartbreaking- emotionally felt. The feeling must've been eerie. I hope you're doing well. *saddens* I know this hurt.

[Mary Helda]

i am okay..it gets easier..i think.*smiles*

[CiNtsaLis]

*holds your hand* I'll help you to stand tall (:

[Mary Helda]

thanks darling..*holds your hand back*

[zunie frost]

this poem has deep emotions in it !! only one with a personal experience can write such a heartfelt poem!!! love reading it !! 90 points thanks for sharing

[Mary Helda]

Thank you so much:-)..your words meant alot to me

[zunie frost]

welcome !!

[Sami Khalil]

A sad but expressive write with a bad dream dimension. Unique to say the least...:).....

[Mary Helda]

thank you sir for your kind words..i appreciate:-)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. .....:))))....

[TheMalady]

I can feel the terror and trauma in this piece. Nicely written. And you really know how to add a spice of drama in this. Thanks a lot for sharing this! :) Good job!

[Mary Helda]

Thank you dear friend:-)

[TheMalady]

You're very welcome, dear! :)

[andrew mitchell]

A powerful sad write which to me reflected on those 200 women kidnapped by that thug Basko and co in Northern Africa. This brings to mind the terrible doings to beautiful people. Why aren't the wrong and evil punished??? Where is that God everyone preaches to, for guidance, to protect!!?? He should intervene!!! Thank you for an excellent write!

[Mary Helda]

i believe God always intervenes. he takes his time sometimes but he alwaya comes through..thank you for reading and for the kind words

[andrew mitchell]

i hope he does now cos some people need him now more than ever i feel and the evil seem to play free! thank you for stimulating my thoughts on the unpunished lol

[Mary Helda]

hehehe...:-)

[Mary Helda]

my pleasure

[Mary Helda]

my pleasure

[andrew mitchell]

you are welcome

[Great Aunt Astri]

Your use of language is very impressive. The subject is of course very sad. I had something similar about my Dad. But I feel your poem has put your mommy to rest in some lovely place! Well done for writing it.

[Mary Helda]

thank you..i hope you are right