Our light is shining ignorantly (Free verse)

Sometimes even with love,certain friendships begin to fail

You and i indulge in a love
So strong no death can violate
And yet
Dusk comes and goes
Along with pieces of our blissful bond

We fell into an abyss of friendship
And gradually got lost in it
Our promises are nolonger as intriguing as the promises of a courtesan
Conversations have become nothing but fleeting pleasantries...

Just like a sex addict drunk on viagra,i am desperate....
To ignite our dying flame

I can not lose you

Author's Note

thank you:-)

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

startling direction this goes...yes, on that third stanza, and the hopes to reignite...after so many years the passion is limited and the two become more like friends rather than lovers...and the last line is telling..."i can not lose you"

and that is more in a physical, kinetic sense...we can be together still, but not really together.

j.

[Mary Helda]

You are definately right about that..thank you so much..i appreciate you dropping by:-)

[Great Aunt Astri]

I can feel the pain and desperation. But there are plenty of fish in the sea! You write very well, Mary and it makes good reading.

[Mary Helda]

Thank you Great Aunt Astri...the sea is full of fish but it still hurts to walk away from someone that you dearly love

[Nigel Newman]

Mary, as others have said, there is a depth of feeling in your writing that shines through. Nice job!

PS However, I can't ignore the spelling in your title, which should be shining not shinning ... and that no longer should have a space in it ... this is me, I'm afraid. But I still think it's a beautiful poem; sad in the sense that so many relationships lose their fire with the passing of time whilst still retaining other less exciting aspects of love; but beautifully written.

Regards, Nigel

[Mary Helda]

hahaha..i love learning from you..i am afraid i am going to rely on your criticism to become a better poetess...:-)...thank you...

[jesserose99]

this moves and I can feel your heart in the words. you paint an intriguing picture here and I am lost in the beauty of your art.

[Mary Helda]

Awwww..i am deeply moved by your words...thank you:-)

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong words and deep emotions in your words.
"Just like a sex addict drunk on viagra,i am desperate....
To ignite our dying flame
I can not lose you"
Hard to release someone when they excite the mind and the body. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mary Helda]

Such kind words..thank you Coyotte...i feel like i am at a luzing end

[Coyote Poetry]

I'm glad and you are welcome.