Sometimes even with love,certain friendships begin to fail
You and i indulge in a love
So strong no death can violate
And yet
Dusk comes and goes
Along with pieces of our blissful bond
We fell into an abyss of friendship
And gradually got lost in it
Our promises are nolonger as intriguing as the promises of a courtesan
Conversations have become nothing but fleeting pleasantries...
Just like a sex addict drunk on viagra,i am desperate....
To ignite our dying flame
startling direction this goes...yes, on that third stanza, and the hopes to reignite...after so many years the passion is limited and the two become more like friends rather than lovers...and the last line is telling..."i can not lose you"
and that is more in a physical, kinetic sense...we can be together still, but not really together.
j.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
You are definately right about that..thank you so much..i appreciate you dropping by:-)
Such an emotional poem. I can definitely tell that this friendship turned to love, and that they didn't want to lose each other. They needed each other to love one another so they would never part and be alone. Very well written!!
startling direction this goes...yes, on that third stanza, and the hopes to reignite...after so many years the passion is limited and the two become more like friends rather than lovers...and the last line is telling..."i can not lose you"
and that is more in a physical, kinetic sense...we can be together still, but not really together.
j.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
You are definately right about that..thank you so much..i appreciate you dropping by:-)
A poem drenched in fear and pain, Mary. It's finely written, emotionally flawless . Maybe writing will have helped a little, it can sometimes. Warmth and light flying your way.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
thank you Emmajpy..writing does help alot..its what enables me to feel better most times
Real emotion shown here, translated into a beautiful poem. I was just wondering, do you write from experience or do you project?
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you..i usually write from experience...when i feel,i write...unless its about love...an intima.. read moreThank you..i usually write from experience...when i feel,i write...unless its about love...an intimate kind of love or if it is a story..that can be imagined and fantasized...i wrote this piece when my best friend and i started going apart...
I think it has an alternating character. From kind of nice in the first stanza, to troubled words in the second and strong, expressive words in the end.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
yes Mimim..it does..thanka for reviewing and reading:-)
8 Years Ago
yes Mimi..it does..thanka for reviewing and reading:-)
Wow, such emotion in this piece. As friendships grow into much much more in one, but not the other...
or a love that simply doesn't last... and than the real sets in. A very moving verse, this ignited flame of superb writing.
bill
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you sir..i really do appreciate your kind words
I love this. I'm going through something quite similar. It's a painful ecstacy that I fear is drawing to a close... the most beautiful, delicious beast to ever have touched me will probably never love me and will likely tire of me altogether soon... it's a tragedy. This poem states how I feel. Thank you for sharing.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you for reading and for your feedback...i am glad you could relate.. and i am sorry that you a.. read moreThank you for reading and for your feedback...i am glad you could relate.. and i am sorry that you are going through the same thing but do not worry...we are strong women...we will go through it