slow circles

fingertips trace
            slow circles on his temples
           i gaze down
          barely whisper-
                      
                   "god...     i love your mouth"

he pauses
       searches my hooded eyes
                  
                  
     "i meant it...     you know?
          
            - i'd move   heaven and earth for you"
  

my back arches involuntarily
                  
                        " you already are..."

Reviews

[Allen Smuckler]

lovely....
beautiful to look at, terrific style and flow
wonderful to read, with just the right expression and pause
enchanting to feel...sensual and honest
Great write, Mary
I loved it
allen

[Elaenor Aisling]

You say so much in so little within these lines. One can definately sense the connection between the speakers and the love between them. Lovely work.

[Leslie Philibert]

A fine poem, with a subtle feeling of sensuality and a clever use of the spoken word,a well observed situation presented lyrically, good work.

[Hayley]

I love writers that can stretch style and make an incredible piece with such few words. I love the use of quotes, very effective.
The expression "hooded eyes" was very unique and meaningful, kind of a disguise, a cover, if you will.
Excellent piece!

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

Oh......very attractive , charming and beautiful lines. Good composing. With wishes.

[WindSong]

A very charming and eloquently composed poem.

WindSong

[Manpreet]

Lovely poem!

[Chris]

This one has heart from the beginning and ends in heat.

[nathan]

Hahaha, that ending. . .

[Cassie Fraga]

aaaaaawwww.... so sweeeeeet!! I love how simple but screaming with meaning and true feeling... I can feel it!!!
that was a great read!! and I love the format of it... very unique... I can digg it!!