Roses For Them

A two-paragraph poem.

Roses For Them

I don't want to be on coffins,

Or be used for offerings,

I don't want to be with god's statues,

I want to be where you don't choose.

O' pluck me, drop me on the army's path,

Every petal of me on the grass,

Sacrifice me for them,

I will be their gem. 

Author's Note

This is a tribute to our soldiers who work hard and sacrifice themselves for our country.

Reviews

[Beren Ongur]

My dear, this is so meaningful. I certainly felt it. The fact that you're 9 years old scares me so much. I read it over and over again, and no matter what I say, I can't describe my feelings as well as a single sentence of yours, it's extremely well thought out. THE WORDS ARE USED PERFECTLY AND I AM PROUD OF YOU.

from my view
The first part was definitely something I experienced recently, when it was a time of rebellion against an authority (belief) that it was very difficult to say, "I don't want to be a part of you." It's really a big thing to carry. And among them, people see you as a "callous" or "aimless" "impostor" just because you didn't die for what they believed in or died for,
but that's not the case because;
In the second part, it is clearly shown that there is another situation in which you can actually sacrifice yourself, not just their way. I UNDERSTAND. I FELT. I LOVE IT I want everyone to see that. Girl, this makes a lot of sense. you're amazingly talented. on favs for sure.

[Martiya Daman]

Thanks for reading Beren, glad you like it! Surely, I will post more like this!

[Twilight]

Before even reading your Author's Note, I understood what this piece is trying to say.

Traditionally, in Britain; we associate the poppy with our war dead. I am sure that you're aware of this. But, you have cleverly substituted the poppies for roses, which demonstrates your sincere love for how our soldiers can sometimes sacrifice themselves (in the line of duty and honour).

[Martiya Daman]

I was not aware of that! The rose sacrified itself just like soldiers do.

Well, that was a nice fact, have a great week ahead and thanks for sharing your thoughts.

[Dylan Macadham]

Congratulations on being in the "Popular Writing" box Martiya!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😃😃😃
And I'm right below you! :)
An impressive poem!

[Martiya Daman]

Thanks Dylan! Hold up, THIS is popular?

[Martiya Daman]

Ah, and my other poem “Sky Full Of Stars” is at the top writing at the top hahaha! Thanks for telling a cool fact!

[Dylan Macadham]

...Oh, Yeah!!!!!! Way to go, you're a Star!!!!!!!😊😃

[Dylan Macadham]

OMG!!!!!! Now you have 2 in Popular!!!😃😃

[Martiya Daman]

I know hahaha!

[Dylan Macadham]

Hope you don't mind, Cafe Star,
if I ask for your expert advise,
from time to time😅

[Martiya Daman]

Advise 1: Don't write everyday (Although I do 😅) so you can revise your work and tell others fluently.

Advice 2: Take a notebook and pen/pencil everywhere so when you are bored or lonely, take them out and doodle for the words.

[Dylan Macadham]

Good advice, actually I do write everyday, but I usually don't post them right away. I save & polish first.
...and I do the notebook thing too!

[Martiya Daman]

Okay!!! Got to remember the third advice real quick!

[Martiya Daman]

3. Do not be scared. Don't be scared. Share your poems in WhatsApp, Instagram, Facebook anywhere with no fear. That is what Writers Cafe teaches us. Make friends along your journey to help you. You'll only get famous by publishing your poem. You won't if you keep it with yourself.

Yep, you might already be using these :O

[Dylan Macadham]

...Write Clearly, Economically (each word counts, no extra words) & Interestingly. ...Here's another one: Write the way you speak, if you spoke the way you wrote. ...yes, I know, this like a riddle😉

[Martiya Daman]

I don't get it

[Dylan Macadham]

...I guess it kind of means ... as your writing improves, so will your speech, and so will your writing.

[Martiya Daman]

Oh, so it kind of a process? My writing improves, my speech does also, and my writing does, and this keeps on happening?

[Dylan Macadham]

Yes, and then one day you're a Famous Bestseller! ...or, not, like me😎🤣

[Efxaris Arampatzi]

Wow Martiya, this poem is fantastic! It carries such a deep, reflective tone, and the powerful imagery of sacrifice and devotion is just spectacular! The way the speaker gives themselves up for others adds a strong layer of selflessness. Your work is really top-tier!

[Martiya Daman]

Thanks for sharing your thoughts Efxaris! The speaker itself is the rose, who wants to sacrifice itself for the soldiers, A great gesture for them.

[Efxaris Arampatzi]

It is really symbolic, nicely written my friend! :)

[A.H.]

what a beautiful thought in this poem. Anything would be a little offering to our Soldiers who put their life on the line and serve our country. Their sacrifice is paramount and country is our Mother, anything for our dear Mother. Roses - they are soft, red, lovely and a balm. this offering would be a great gesture to our soldiers. they need every bit of our support and appreciation of their service. Thanks Martiya, for writing this tribute to Soldiers. You did a good service too here. Have a wonderful day!

[Martiya Daman]

Thanks Abhi for sharing your thoughts! I was actually inspired by an another poem and then I added a little changes and made in simple. Soldiers are the only reason our country is safe from any danger. You keep writing as well, and have a wonderful day!