Peace In Darkness

A perfect night where it rains across the fields, and flowers get rid of their thirst.

Peace in Darkness

I layed on my bed,

I looked out of my window,

The water flowers fed,

Out I tip - toed.

I open my curtains,

Look at the maize and rice fields,

More than certains,

A drop on my head that I feeled.

I opened my eyes wide,

I saw gentle rain,

Ants under leaves they hide,

Thirst gone in flowers veins.

Dark and dark,

Yet night was peace,

Water on head marks,

A weather I pleased.

Reviews

[Twilight]

Some simple but effective metaphors are included here, and it has mostly been made to rhyme.

"Gentle" in this context, refers to the gentle "sound" of light rain. So, technically; you cannot "see" something which is gentle in english. In England, we don't use the word gentle in that way. But, no matter.

I can relate to the tranquility and peace of darkness, particularly when lying down to sleep in my bed at night. With my window slightly open, I like it when I can sense a freshness in the air; from the refreshing aromas.

The aromas are subtle rather than strong, occasionally caught by a gentle breeze when it drifts through. Lawn grass, flowers and other plants; each add a tiny bit of scent to the night air.

Keep writing, and pleasant dreams tonight; when finally going to sleep in your bed. No doubt, after another busy day. I know how it feels, Martiya.

[Martiya Daman]

Thanks for sharing your thoughts, Julian. That is true. When I think of a gentle rain, I picture a scene of only a few drops falling from the sky and the drops also being light.

Since there are only a few, they are pretty hard to see. Well, a busy day for me as well, tomorrow is my sports day so... Enjoy your day ahead!

[Beren]

perfect narration, perfect word choices. I admire you, it is so sweet and beautifully written. KEEP GOING!!!

[Martiya Daman]

Thanks Beren, glad you liked it! Keep going as well! 😊😁

[Efxaris Arampatzi]

Wonderful work my friend! I love the words you use that create such a beautiful imagery especially with the rain! You've written a masterpiece!!!

[Martiya Daman]

Thanks, Efxaris! I am glad you enjoyed my "masterpiece" 🙂

[A.H.]

Beautiful images. Rains always bring about a certain mood and peace. I like rain, it makes my day always. Nicely penned, Martiya. Keep going.

[Martiya Daman]

Thanks for reading and taking your time Abhi. Ofcourse, who can forget about rain!

[A.H.]

Sure thing, anytime ! Thank you.

[Dylan Macadham]

a Happy Message, Martiya, well and happily written! Imagery, excellent, it felt like I was tip-toeing too😊

[Martiya Daman]

You should when it rains next time! Enjoy your day too!

[Dylan Macadham]

haha, I will have to wait a while to tip toe, right now the temperature here is below zero :)

[Martiya Daman]

I would still do that even if I get sick L O L :)))

[Dylan Macadham]

haha, there's an old song called 'Tip toe through the Tulips'.

[poetgurl]

Nicely written, emotional write.

[Martiya Daman]

Thanks for taking your time, poetgurl.