Her As Music

by Martin Martel

Her As Music 

I've heard folk songs through your ears

I have seen them in your eyes

talk country through your mouth

you speak blues and so do I

Could you be so Avant Garde?

I've smelt the punk rock in your hair

having felt a progression in your touch

your lungs are full of jazz

your heart beats like a soundtrack

Could you be the mix that I desire?

You are my new wave

we see the chaos in our soul

so lets bebop the metal

and we can reggae to the birth

with the dance

of stars

and melodies

Reviews

[Belle]

I really like this metaphor. I think the use of all the genres makes for a very modern romance, but there's also a timeless quality to it. You've also linked the different genres to personal traits very well, using the genre's purpose/reputation as a descriptive tool; I can imagine what the accent of a girl who "talk(s) country" would sound like. My only qualm would be the last three lines - whilst still good! - are a little out of sync with the rest of the poem. Whereas your description elsewhere is very clear and evocative, "bebop the metal" and "reggae the birth" don't quite have that impact.

[Confuser]

It is a great poem, flows beautiful and the metaphors lovely - I love music and you have written a very nice piece. Your voice needs to be heard. Please keep writing. Thank you.

[Rhia Barton]

I love love love this! The way you've personified the music is awesome, I think I may have found a favourite poem...

[Arthur Martel]

Waw, thank you so much !

[harshita]

wow!!!!!! love it :) keep writing!!!!!! :)

[ANTO]

so many well chosen and crafted musical references - this speaks to my musical soul Martin. Thanks for sharing your poetry here :)