Her As Music

by Martin Martel

Her As Music 

I've heard folk songs through your ears

I have seen them in your eyes

talk country through your mouth

you speak blues and so do I

Could you be so Avant Garde?

I've smelt the punk rock in your hair

having felt a progression in your touch

your lungs are full of jazz

your heart beats like a soundtrack

Could you be the mix that I desire?

You are my new wave

we see the chaos in our soul

so lets bebop the metal

and we can reggae to the birth

with the dance

of stars

and melodies

Reviews

[Belle]

I really like this metaphor. I think the use of all the genres makes for a very modern romance, but there's also a timeless quality to it. You've also linked the different genres to personal traits very well, using the genre's purpose/reputation as a descriptive tool; I can imagine what the accent of a girl who "talk(s) country" would sound like. My only qualm would be the last three lines - whilst still good! - are a little out of sync with the rest of the poem. Whereas your description elsewhere is very clear and evocative, "bebop the metal" and "reggae the birth" don't quite have that impact.

[Fay]

This is indrediblee wowwww

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Love the metaphors in this piece, very romantic too. I really liked this poem, well written.

Kaze~ :-)

[Beccy]

Such a complex mixture, as we are; you seem to have the female of the species perfectly tagged.

Really enjoyed this. Beccy.

[Aaron Jinks]

This is sweet man. I love music, I play some instruments and I am a hopeless romantic so this really speaks to me haha. I loved all the metaphors you used especially "your lungs full of Jazz." Great job. :)

[~]

Wonderfully penned. Rebellious verses!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This is very different, but brilliant piece.
To write about a girl, comparing her to music... saying she is the music.
Its beautiful, deep, an meaningful.
I really enjoyed this piece.
Cleaver write :)

[Nope]

I like your continuity with the metaphor, and you didn't really overuse it which is nice. It also flowed really well, I liked it!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Beautiful poem about all kinds of music. Well done. :) Rudi

[Elie Marie]

This is great. I love that you've used all different types of music to paint such a picture of love.