A little girl

The story of a broken girl and her thought

A little girl

Broken promises and broken dreams

A little girl, tearing at the seams

Crying and screaming, struggling to get free

A little girl, drowning in misery

She sits on her bed with eyes tightly shut

A razor in hand making a cut 

The droplets of blood slowly trickles down

Shining like rubies dug from the ground

Her eyes fill with tears of sadness and pain

Falling in sync with the thunderous rain

A little girl with tears all cried out

Goes to bed, swimming in doubt

Reviews

[David Elijah]

This poem describes very little of what she's feeling or thinking. Although the imagery is pretty on point (especially the rubies), that's is all that I see in this. I see she's sad but why? Was she wronged by someone? Does she hate herself? Anyways, the ideas that were presented were written and rhymed well for the most part. Don't be discouraged tho 'cause my criticism is simply based on what I personally prefer.

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never understood girls that inflict harm on themselves maybe cause i never stopped to think why