Good night-

Good night to those

who are listening

to the chimes

hanging from the

Red

saturated bulb

pulsating in the

Heavy fog.

I look at the light

and delicate skin of the

quiet Goddess

beside me

She breathes, in her

sleep, without

sound

Nestled in cozy dreams

or

waking to

Them

Reviews

[Danni]

I think 'the red' is the line below, saturated bulb.
I don't think we need to know who the Goddess or Them are, deictic elements make it good :]

[Not A Writer]

I don't know what the red is here:

Good night to those

who are listening

to the chimes

hanging from the

Red

saturated bulb

pulsating in the

Heavy fog.


Is the red a stop light? Who is the Goddess? Your writes can be really good I just need to know more description.