My love for thee

My love for thee

is like the burning village

Deteriorating fast

And the ash that falls,

gripping to my clothes

and face

Are inherited markings

and have been smeared with the tears

of a lost structure

Author's Note

Open to all

Reviews

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I like the poem .
I never do this .. why start now .. lol but i was thinking , and i know at times when i am told to change something i get a little upset .. as it is my / your writing ..

what about
my love for thee is like the village burning
dying

and the ash that falls clinging on clothes , face

i hope you take no offense as i am no writer just looking at it differently ..

i like the last 2 lines of the lost structure.. very metaphoric .. a nice poem and flow ..

Peace
Chloe