Sharing

                            Sharing

I saw you and the world went away

so far as not to be found, I didn't wish to look.

You are all I need to see, all I need beside me

the world is a torrent of chaos and you bring peace

your hand in mine, a smile that never ceases, a glow.

You are here and the world is not to be seen, long gone.

Tenderness that only you can give, the world could share

a love so sweet, so pure, so caring, the world long gone.

Yet so much in need, you willingly give it all to me

I cannot share it, so I lovingly give it back to you.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

This poem tells me that even if the world is in turmoil, that one special person who loves you can soothe your mind. Love does that to you. This is a tender and romantic write Dave.

Chris

[barleygirl]

I love the way the intensity of your message seems to increase as I read along. I like the way there's a central theme (troubles disappear) & all your lines support this idea & make us feel it. Even tho you are a dyed-in-the-wool romantic writer, I could also read this as ANYTHING that transports a person . . . could be gardening or pets or sailing or listening to music. We all need some passion that makes the noise & strife of the world disappear! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kay]

Very nicely written. I enjoyed the read.

[billyjf]

Your style of punctuation confused me a bit. I really love your metaphor of sharing love, especially in the last line; and the poem's overall theme of togetherness.

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful and kind words for love.
'Yet so much in need, you willingly give it all to me
I cannot share it, so I lovingly give it back to you."
The above lines. All we can do Dave. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Wild Rose]

True love
What a joy to be so much in love the world does not exist for you
All your troubles and problems are smoothed away

[jacob erin-cilberto]

when she is the only world we need to see, to feel, to share...that is love.

and love is giving and not worrying about what we will get in return
nice expression here, Dave,
j.