Slipping

First post

She defies my fade,
As I slip-slip-away.
At the very edge of breath,
She breaks through MY decay.

Minds are meant to bend
but mine just breaks.

Beneath the weeping willow,
Their laughing for my sake.
At the very edge of breath
She breaks through the shade -

Sweeping my spots of darkness
(as I slip-slip) away....

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

At the very edge of breath
She breaks through MY decay

At the very edge of breath
She breaks through the shade

Wonderfully expressive and powerful in its content. Pleased I stopped by.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very clever rhyme and slant rhyme. I like the short lines that add to the beat of this powerful piece of writing..
especially these lines:
"At the very edge of breath/ She breaks through my decay"
wish I had written those.
j.