By your own hand

Love’s wildest son

Stepping in time with torment

A love of the hunt

Leads to love of the death

 

So you trod on the flower

That they saw through the window

So many times as children

Without a song to bring out the sun

 

In crashing down with the rain

You took the water in your mouth

And tasted the earth

Spluttered the salt and gravel

 

It was more than just a sign

That your gates were closing

I saw the key turning

Locked by your own hand

 

Blind love left your kiss

And true friend left your hand

Their forgiving side is dead

From thinking of your falling

 

The soft echo that you heard all over

“Life is no more permanent

Than the love that left you”

The parting guest in the final hour

 

Do you play that harp alone now

Willing the sleeping night to answer?

Can you still wrestle a note from it

Before hushing the sounds of morning?

 

And would you ever dare to tell

A later love about these times?

Or dare to find the true relation

Between time and peace?

 

Knowing that time may slow the tears

But tears have means to slow the time

Reviews

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Very nice! I deeply enjoyed the imagery and many unanswered questions. A thought-provoking write!

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

This is one of the finest I've read from you Mark.

1. Knowing that time may slow the tears
2. You took the water in your mouth - And tasted the earth

[The White Wolf]

That first stanza was a gooood one! It drew me in right away. I feel loss with this and also despair but there is a tint of hope at the end. I appreciate the ticking of time that you have incorporated..."time may slow the tears...tears have means to slow time"....they say time heals all wounds. All wounds leave scars though and time will be the reveal of them. As always, my dear friend, I stand in impulsive surrender upon your words!

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. i find your words overwhelming ... it seems you've been through a consuming experience that was different from any other ... i agree with emily ... by the time i reached the end of this piece, i was struck by the sadness that i often see in my own situation in life ... beautiful writing, monsieur ...

[Emily B]

I think there must be an amazing story behind this

[Kiara]

I loved this, it was so beautiful.

[kidd x]

sounds like a deep write. Beuatiful read.

[Callie]

Very beautiful. As said previously by others, the imagery and layered, emotional self-questioning all come together in the end.
"Knowing that time may slow the tears
But tears have means to slow the time" I found these two lines the most powerful.
Great work.

[Sleeping Maiden]

This is wonderful! So many great lines and descriptions... so many emotions too..
I love the very end.. =) It does make me feel sad..
but the imagery is just amazing. Great write! I enjoyed this..

[Ruth]

Very intense- beautiful! So many layers to question and dwell on, haunting, truly xoxo