See this day arrive

Sunrise dusts off last shadows of night
Warmth caresses my face
Illumination troubles my eyes

Remaining awake at odds with my bodies will
My mind slows but upholds it's exertion
Overrun by guilt and lamentation

I needed to see this day arrive

The day I leave the place I love

I have no will to go
But yesterday's crimes will not go unpunished

Reviews

[PaperLife]

This has such broken feelings inside of it. It has left a troubled wave inside of me after I read it. The way you express the unwanted coming of day, the realization you actually have decided upon what you must do. You have a powerful way of stating everything you need to say in such a short poem. ANd it honestly made me feel.

"Illimination troubles my eyes"

That was a beautiful sentence. You began the poem softly but powerfully and it echoed, rolling like thunder all the way through to your very last sentence. Well done.

[TL Boehm]

I have no will to go but yesterdays crimes will not go unpunished. Enigmatic. The whole poem is a cloaking device. What was it that brought the poet to this place. Intriguing write.

[SamanthaMarie]

You make it hard to give constructive criticism. I just want to punch you in your face, you're so good.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

this is deep!

great write

[Ruth]

Such an immense raw quality to this! The ending sums it all up prefectly!
We can only put up with so much guilt attatched to the heart....needs clarity at times!
Wonderful work
xoxo

[SAGE]

I enjoyed this poem. It was very intriguing.

[Buniheart]

This is a very emotionally sad, and awaking poem. It seems to me as the main character is struggling to wake up - in to reality. I love the effortlessness of your words, describing the waking up to realize you've lost the one place you love so dearly! I completely connect with this!! Thanks for an amazing poem

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

unpunished indeed, well done, good read.

[Lily Mae]

Being broken in spirit and feeling in between the two worlds is the worse. The void of limbo and the want and need to go and yet feeling like we will never be set free from crimes committed... I do believe we are forgiven in time...but in a time and way we have no control over.. so loving yourself until that time is what is key...x