I miss your words Mark, this is a remarkable poem. The last stanza is in particular very rich with meaning to me. In fact the tone of the last two stanzas is so interesting from a psychological perspective....
A sad, dark poem, so many thoughts, all placed in fine style. Undoubtedly best exposed if factual, if not an empathic piece for the fathers who surely must think and feel that way. Sweetness and love in those last few words - and what wonderful advice.
again, your intimation, wrapped in beguiling analogy, leads the mind to despondent horizons ..... suns setting into a sizzling sea, putting out the lights.
this reads as a well-thought-out eventuality, bringing tears to my eyes. a conceived scenario of a father half a world away from his family; one bereft of hope, well schooled in the injustices of the world. a profound legacy he leaves his son. brilliantly and quietly eternal.
Wonderful poem. There is much strength in the words you choose to give the readers. The love you present for your son gives me the feeling of that ache if he were to lose you. My hope is that he doesn't anytime soon. A well written piece.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Your welcome. You did a great job of depicting the love between Father and Son.