I know she's braver than me
A Poem by
Mark D
In almost total darkness Even the crows have gone silent If only for a moment As the shadow slipped away My friend and I inch forward Holding our breath To hear that screaming sound The crows go mad again I fear a young death Our white bodies shake Hers in anticipation And mine in fear True to my nature I could flee in panic But why cut this moment short? The will was ours to come My friend more daring than I Steps further into the dark A tear finds my cheek Before I retreat towards the light The rest of her experience Becomes a story to me She doesn’t divide our roles in the telling of the tale But I know she’s braver than me
© 2012 Mark D
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Apparently something sinister awaits, but what? Oh, it doesn't matter, does it? The fact remains that she craves the thrill of it much more than you. Long ago, a young lady led me through a dark, unknown woodland, and it was much as you say here. Good fun for her, goosebumps for me.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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that's an awesome write , great work!!
kept me gripped all the write :)
love the way you wrote it , the way you describe the journey and the ending was great too! you have a lovely way with words
Posted 12 Years Ago
that's an awesome write , great work!!
kept me gripped all the write :)
love the way you wrote it , the way you describe the journey and the ending was great too! you have a lovely way with words
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
. am glad i followed emily to this post ...
. this is beautifully written ...
. the first two lines of that last stanza are extremely overwhelming ...
Posted 12 Years Ago
. am glad i followed emily to this post ...
. this is beautifully written ...
. the first two lines of that last stanza are extremely overwhelming ...
the portrait reminds me of a young lady . . . it is a poignant tale, one I will long remember
Posted 12 Years Ago
the portrait reminds me of a young lady . . . it is a poignant tale, one I will long remember
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Apparently something sinister awaits, but what? Oh, it doesn't matter, does it? The fact remains that she craves the thrill of it much more than you. Long ago, a young lady led me through a dark, unknown woodland, and it was much as you say here. Good fun for her, goosebumps for me.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Apparently something sinister awaits, but what? Oh, it doesn't matter, does it? The fact remains that she craves the thrill of it much more than you. Long ago, a young lady led me through a dark, unknown woodland, and it was much as you say here. Good fun for her, goosebumps for me.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
This is powerfully deep & ever so emotional,
Very well written.
Posted 12 Years Ago
This is powerfully deep & ever so emotional,
Very well written.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Mark D Edinburgh, United Kingdom
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