I know she's braver than me

In almost total darkness
Even the crows have gone silent
If only for a moment
As the shadow slipped away

My friend and I inch forward
Holding our breath
To hear that screaming sound
The crows go mad again

I fear a young death
Our white bodies shake
Hers in anticipation
And mine in fear

True to my nature
I could flee in panic
But why cut this moment short?
The will was ours to come

My friend more daring than I
Steps further into the dark
A tear finds my cheek
Before I retreat towards the light

The rest of her experience

Becomes a story to me
She doesn’t divide our roles in the telling of the tale
But I know she’s braver than me

Reviews

[Samuel Dickens]

Apparently something sinister awaits, but what? Oh, it doesn't matter, does it? The fact remains that she craves the thrill of it much more than you. Long ago, a young lady led me through a dark, unknown woodland, and it was much as you say here. Good fun for her, goosebumps for me.

[CHRIS ANDES]

..the crows and darkness seems so mysterious to me
...well written
=]

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Lovely. I really like the expressions and word choices. Excellent poetry!

[Ama May Cooper]

A sensative account of two close characters i feel on adventures together. That almost jealously of teh braveness but resepct nonetheless. Lovely meaningful piece of work

[afra]

great write ...deep and beautiful

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this too- a sinster poem with a kind of open end that lets the reader speculate and work on, good write.

[MOON]

Good write , descriptive felt the fear the scary moments .

[eglantine]

hmmm I actually read the line, "Our white bodies shake" as "Our bodies shake white" the first time i read it... I like how that sounds, like the fear/anticipation is static falling off the body. New title perhaps? ONly because it's the last line too...

[layla]

a thriller huh?? lol love it!

[Jvonne]

Suspense, suspense….
Whatever happens next?
Love it

[BIIKAY]

the dark is mysterious in more then one way... very well written my friend!!