Touch of Green

Touch of Green

A Poem by Maria
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When everything has already finished and you believe in your inner own powers,suddenly you might feel that there is one particle in your soul which wants to repeat the same moments..

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Your eyes will never change,
My skin will always feel this touch of green
I see no meaning or regret,
In this glance,so inexplicably deep.

I would embrace all those nights
Which still carry our previous deeds ,
Though your eyes are strangely warm
My pain will never be redeemed.

 
Just let these minutes last a little bit longer
One more time
I want to see our dawn,
I will never drown myself in this depth
Though something within me wishes to be drawn...

© 2018 Maria


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you write very deeply and beautifully with a yearning heart. poignant thoughts ...

Posted 6 Years Ago


Maria

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much
kinda of a deep write, enjoyed this write a lot so well written

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a deep and philosophical poem. It has beauty, meaning, wisdom and an air of mystery.

I must point that in the second stanza (paragraph), the correct grammar to your line should be:
'I would embrace all those nights'. (Because 'nights' is in the plural form.) The word 'that' should be used in the singular form: 'I would embrace that night'.

WELL DONE



Posted 6 Years Ago


Maria

6 Years Ago

And again thank you..
Thanks for your correction and sorry that I did not pay attention to it.. read more
Gosh, Maria!
This is so very deep and filled with meaning and emotion I easily and completely relate to and with on every level of its essence.
Perfectly rendered Free Verse Quatrains speak so vibrantly unto one's tender senses, touching every place that knows, yearns, and understands.
Your flow, word choices, and line-breaks keep the mind, heart, and soul captivated beginning to end.
Check "Though something within me wishes to be drown..." (perhaps, "drawn"?)

Thank you ever-so dearly and graciously for sharing your splendid poetic voice … warmest hugs! ⁓ Richard : )

Posted 6 Years Ago


Maria

6 Years Ago

Thank you for your time spent in order to make some comments 😍😍
I consider everything .. read more
Richard🖌

6 Years Ago

Your poetry is a pleasure, Maria, as is receiving the warmth of your lovely comments. ; )

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Tbilisi, Georgia



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