When everything has already finished and you believe in your inner own powers,suddenly you might feel that there is one particle in your soul which wants to repeat the same moments..
Your eyes will never change,
My skin will always feel this touch of green I see no meaning or regret, In this glance,so inexplicably deep.
I would embrace all those nights
Which still carry our previous deeds
, Though your eyes are strangely warm
My pain will never be redeemed. Just let these minutes last a little bit longer
One more time I want to see our dawn, I will never drown myself in this depth
Though something within me wishes to be drawn...
This is a deep and philosophical poem. It has beauty, meaning, wisdom and an air of mystery.
I must point that in the second stanza (paragraph), the correct grammar to your line should be:
'I would embrace all those nights'. (Because 'nights' is in the plural form.) The word 'that' should be used in the singular form: 'I would embrace that night'.
WELL DONE
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
And again thank you..
Thanks for your correction and sorry that I did not pay attention to it.. read moreAnd again thank you..
Thanks for your correction and sorry that I did not pay attention to it ( it often happens )
I would like to share one funny fact..my writings sometimes are mysterious for me as well)) therefore, frequently I write about some emotions..pain.. and feelings ..as if I have my eyes closed.. and later when time passes I cannot retrieve.. what were that feelings..
So, sometimes going into the deep can be confusing not only for the reader
Gosh, Maria!
This is so very deep and filled with meaning and emotion I easily and completely relate to and with on every level of its essence.
Perfectly rendered Free Verse Quatrains speak so vibrantly unto one's tender senses, touching every place that knows, yearns, and understands.
Your flow, word choices, and line-breaks keep the mind, heart, and soul captivated beginning to end.
Check "Though something within me wishes to be drown..." (perhaps, "drawn"?)
Thank you ever-so dearly and graciously for sharing your splendid poetic voice … warmest hugs! ⁓ Richard : )
Posted 6 Years Ago
6 Years Ago
Thank you for your time spent in order to make some comments 😍😍
I consider everything .. read moreThank you for your time spent in order to make some comments 😍😍
I consider everything you tell me 😇. Will try my best so that I can always hear motivating words from you,dear
6 Years Ago
Your poetry is a pleasure, Maria, as is receiving the warmth of your lovely comments. ; )