My Hopeless Ocean

If I could create the reality of my own,

You would never find a place for yourself.

You would endlessly wander within solemn walls,

You would feel your body and soul becoming slender.

Within the reality of my own,

I would be the goddess of rain with a silver crown,

And you like a tragic beggar looking for home,

Would avoid my glance full of disgust.

I believe,that within the world of my own,

Creating divine laws,

I would be the most powerful power,

Your never ending story...

And each imploring whisper to slow down this torture,

Would be commonly finished with hundreds of commas..

You endlessly suffering creature,

Will you ever mind my hopeless oceans,that I am destined to be drawn to?

I believe,You will rigidly mourn to your rivers

As forever  fallen people do...

Reviews

[BlackPrince]

You write with such beauty and depth and truth.

I love your writing style.

[Maria]

Thank you my dear friend.. these words really encourage me a lot

[Addiy]

Excellent use of words. Simply fantastic.

[Prashant Kashyap]

impressive words.... just amazing

[Ava gray]

99.99 rating from me! all up i loved it!

[Ava gray]

no make it 100

[yuhee]

Lovely and powerful piece. Loved reading this. Thanks for sharing.

[Maria]

Thank you for reading

[OI-B]

I really loved it! :3
It sounds like a Gothic poem.

[Maria]

Ohh,yes !! I do love Gothic poems!

[OI-B]

I think I would create a personal profile in this page. And, in that way I would share my piece of writings as you do.
Because this is an idea of a collegue here in my institution. I am an Academic Adviser of English language. The idea of this is to motivate my students the habit of writing. :D
I will send you a friend request later.
Have a great day.

[Maria]

thank you. I am a non-native English speaking teacher. Simply enjoy writing))

[Stacy Purvis]

I enjoy the depth of this piece. Your choice of words is an even bigger surprise. I'm lost in translation but I do enjoy this piece very much! Thank you for sharing. xxx

[Maria]

Thank you dear... sometimes even I od not understand till the end .what I say... I need to go back to that emotions,retrieve that feelings to understand my own words

[Stacy Purvis]

I've know that feeling. You have a Beautiful Soul.

[Maria]

[Joey Nizz]

Well wrote, I like this piece, thanks for writing it!

I would be the most powerful power,
Your never ending story...
I love this part, it kinda gave me shivers lol.