No Love

I often wonder why some people hate/fear things that are different, instead of trying to learn them to understand...

 

No Love

 

Have you ever wondered how it would be

to never be loved by anyone, no one at all.

Your parents would not have you. No love.

You never found any friends, to laugh with.

 

Dark despair, poisoning your inner self,

Leaving you empty, but filled with pain.

Loneliness, a part of a normal day. No love.

Wonder if light ever will find your door.

 

Oh, but those who weep will never find peace,

So therefore you laugh to yourself in the dark.

A hilarious laughter, full of envy, full of blame.

Why will no one help you to find love? No love.

 

Ah, deep sighs, heavy air, dirty pollution… inside.

Nobody cares about your creative mind. NO LOVE.

Why are you treated like this? You’re different, but…

You are also like me, like them, they just don’t see it.

 

 © 2008 Maria Retz

Author's Note

Please let me know if you find errors in the text. I am trying to learn English as fluently as possible. Thank you

Reviews

[G]

Nice, the thoughts of a creative mind. I think you should have used wondering instead of wonder
"wonder if light will find my door"
"wondering if light will find my door" but you are the poet so I don't know if that was intentional or not. FOr english not to be your first language you seemed to have mastered it pretty well.

[luke312]

I can relate to this on great use of words and expressions very righteous

[kurrupted]

Believe me the lines infuses the reader into the sad theme that one doesnt even know whether they have observed some syntax or topographical error..........so so deep.

[emmajoy]

What a poem, so full of doubts, sadness, but, maybe too, there are some truths.

You write very well, 'have incredible use of the English language and, let me stress, put many to shame.

Technically your poem has fine metre and the words are well selected. Whether you usee Word for the punctuation, I don't know, but your punctuation is excellent.

A grand piece of writing, Maria - congratulations.

[bluessadmood]

oh dear forget about errors ,this is wonderful ,dreamy and full of love and passion ,unlimited love,you have become a dreamer my friend i just loved your words ,so sweet and creative...
Dark despair, poisoning your inner self,
Leaving you empty, but filled with pain
Loneliness, a part of a normal day. No love.
Wonder if light ever will find your door.
Oh, but those who weep will never find peace
Nobody cares about your creative mind. NO LOVE
this is so wonderful,i really liked it a lot,lovely words ,pretty dreamy words

[Kiddx]

Oh, but those who weep will never find peace, - this is such a truthful line right here
So therefore you laugh to yourself in the dark. - and such wisdom in this line
A hilarious laughter, full of envy, full of blame. - full of truth again
Why will no one help you to find love? No love. - full of wisdom and truth

Over all I just love this stanza here, this is a very well written write here, i enjoyed this.

[nicole_newallo]

Maria, your poem was heartfelt. I didn't see any errors, but then I think with an artists mind. Which is grossly only understood by other artists. For someone whose English is not yet fluent that was amazing. The flow of it was beautiful.

[Nik Dendera]

No errors at all.

Wonderful piece, very honest, especially the last line. It's brutal in its language, but its so well written, it carries it off perfectly.

An excellent poem!

[Angel Baby]

This poem is penned beautifully and I truly enjoyed reading it. A lot of emotions went into this, and made it the perfect write that it is. Thanks for sharing.