Look Now What Happened

This is not anything that has happened to me. The lines just came to me and I wrote them down :)

 

Oh, crap!

Look now what happened…

Again I sit here,

encircled in pain,

encircled in misery.

Yes, I know, you’re right…

I should not have done that,

I should have waited,

waited to see

how things would evolve,

if things would change,

but they never did.

I was right,

yet, you were also right…

and now I have

to take the consequence,

to live with the knowledge

that he died,

not physically,

but inside…

Oh, crap!

Look now what happened…

It doesn’t help if I cry,

it doesn’t help if I wait.

Things are done,

things have happened.

I can only move along

with time,

as it changes my life.

  

© 2008 Maria Retz

 

Author's Note

Please let me know if you find errors in the English language. I am trying to learn English as fluently as possible. Thank you

Reviews

[emmajoy]

T his is outgoing, straight English, slang ('crap') maybe but, the fl ow i s fine.

It doesn't help if I cry, / it doesn't help if I wait. /Things are done,things have happened. / I can only move alongwith time, as it changes my life. - how true.

I wish I c ould write as well in an other language. Maybe it helps to read English st ories/poetry either on here or for real; would give more insight int o punctuation, grammar and vocabulary - I'm sure you do that already anyway.

The emotion behind this is evident and fl ows well from the 'page'. It's l ike a two way conversation that comes over very clearly.

I really look f orward to reading more of your work.

[luke312]

I personally didn't see any major errors but then again it's 4:35am here but it's an Good Poem Don't stop writing

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Powerful display of emotions and the turmoil that arises when a relationship ends and we now realize we should have seen the signs coming... I think you did great in the wording and expression... awesome job.

[beancountersar]

Great line...""I can only move along with time". I like the flow of this one.