Silent Snow

One winter, the city was covered with snow,
In a distant hollow, in a black pit,
Snow lay thick, appearing dark,
Children interrupted the city's silence,
Evening was upon us
As I quietly walked the street with slow steps, the snow stood silent,
Only the crunch of my shoes
And the distant voices of children reached my ears.
The snow did not stop falling, like the blossoms
Of cherry trees brought by the spring wind,
It fluttered in the sky.
I felt sadness,
For I was alone.
The thought of returning home did not entice me.
I texted my then-boyfriend,
Who would gladly meet me,
I remember we bought sweets,
Visited his relatives in a warm house,
We talked, drank,
Sometimes it's worth it to veer off the path.
Yet the snow continued to remain silent, its surface reflecting
Art that created new impressions for me.

Reviews

[Twilight]

"Sometimes it's worth it to veer off the path", is a line which could be taken literally, but instead refers to the protagonist's enjoyment with a boyfriend (when they talked and drank). Of course, it could well be a reference to both. Clearly, this is a lovely piece of festive writing; and I always look forward to Christmas myself. Not only have you referred to some visual signs of Christmas beauty, in the outdoors; but also some warm emotions. Even the sound, of snow crunching beneath your shoes. And, as you said; it falls differently to blossom. In addition, to pointing out the sadness of being alone. Interestingly, the theme of isolation in different forms; has manifested elsewhere (within other poems from yourself). At the very end, you leave a reminder of that sense of constancy; which a layer of snowfall so easily brings. Thanks for sharing this, with us.

[Kelly Scheppers]

The ambiance of a silent snow is one of the most beautiful wonders we shall ever see. It's almost magical, to witness the impact those little flakes can amass. Love that it gave you inspiration to write. Seasonal pieces, especially of winter, are a personal favorite. Thank you for sharing, Mari!

[Black Branches]

Thank you for your review. 💗