The Waiting Willow

My back absorbs the cooling earth
the willow shades my heart
Upon the beckoning breeze
I hear the steps of love

 

For you
I am
the one

 

The trickle of the brook calls
as I long for sweet release
Once warm within the arms
I freeze amongst the peace

 

For you
I'm not
the one

 

Fluttering petals float the winds
I cast them to the skies
My wishes true then not
forever swirling thoughts inside

 

For you
I'll wait
right here

 

Alive then dead or somewhere in between
glittering drops trace my cheeks
as I stand to water's side
the first step is the coldest

 

For you
I'll wait
No more

 

Beauty sails the water deep
like an angel floating softly
Hair surrounding face and form
forever lost at sea

 

From you
my love
I'm free

Reviews

[Zoe Jay]

Lovely play on the old he-loves-me-he-loves-me-not theme, very well written, with lovely imagery and classic descriptions. Slightly whimsical, but melancholy. Nice structure. The classic images give it a softness and sense of romance....willow... brook....petals....tears.... angel. But the short refrains, which give it the loves-me-loves-me-not feel, cast a darker and more uncertain tone over the poem. Nice write.

[Sarah McConnaughey]

A very beautiful poem with excellent flowing and wording. Thank you so much for sharing, I loved it. :)

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Sad. Wonderfully told story. Glad you are free.

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

A interesting piece full of life and imagery. Cleverly written. An absorbing read.

[HoorayForUnderdog]

Your poem has nice form and a good steady beat to it -- haunting, really. Kudos

[Marie Harrison]

Thanks for sharing. Loved this poem.

[melissa]

wonderful:)

[Ruth]

There is something inviting to this poem as well :) Deeply thoughtful and wow!
There is something lost and buried, well, afloat! Gloriously told love!
xx

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

The pain here drags on slowly and dreadfully.
You mesh up these powerful emotions with beautiful scenes.

[Closed Account]

Yes, very deep, hard to know what to take from it. Beayutifully written