Doublet

a mask
a charade
a facade of great proportion
you hide behind such grandiose contortion

 

alone
abandoned
a barren heart self annihilated
a tattered genius so complicated

 

warmth
fear
a nexus combining my heart
an amalgam driven apart

 

loss
gain
forever adjoined doublet
enduringly kept at bay

Reviews

[GamingGal]

Pros: I miss seeing poems like these, poems with an immense vocabulary and can express their ideas in few lines and words. I like the brevity of this one. It keeps things to the point and keeps us focused without getting off-track.

Cons: None.

Overall: A good poem that was a breath of fresh air, despite the twinge of sorrow it leaves behind.

[Closed Account]

Classy write.

[Doreen]

I like that you start with things in common - mask charade / alone abandoned. And then it changes to opposites that fit well together - warmth fear / loss gain. I love the message in this and may just share this with a few that I know. Nice work.

[Undying Glory]

this was impressive and deep work, i sure like this a lot. those single-word verses are real nice with lots of impact. this is a great poem.
"warmth
fear
a nexus combining my heart
an amalgam driven apart"
now that was just awesome. great work!

[Twilight]

The wording here is minimalist, and very direct. In places, slightly cryptic, perhaps? The structure and ryhme pattern are both fine (and consistent). Thankyou, Margaret!

[Poetic Beauty]

Your words clearly express what the feeling is in this poem. It is very well written.

[E.H. Monroe]

The warmth fear combo is a nice mixture. usually warmth is placed with a feeling is grace and here its that ol hot fear that stamps the heart alive.
This can be seen as anyone. We all have the right mask for the right occasion.

Well done in fewer words than most with a louder message

bravo

[Calypso]

Starting the poem with one word is nice and a good benefit. I like the mirror affect you added.
Very nice, well written.

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beautifully done, the flow is impeccable..the one word lines give that punchy feel and keep the whole thing sharp...

[Marie Harrison]

I'm loving your poetry!

[sarah]

wonderful poem really great and holds a wonderful message