The Colloquy Beneath

The impetus of delirium,

drills deep into my brain.
The drifting shadow provokes,

my opulence to strain.
Impetuous choice of words,

befuddle all mankind.
Disentangle my intent,

of the colloquy beneath the rhyme.
Incontrovertibly I say to thee,

I know thy true intent.
Entrée oh aberration,

because my mind is spent!

-Margaret

Reviews

[Tommy]

I love the versatile way you use this perplexing diction! The rhymes flow great! You definatly have a great grasp on the lexis of English.

Captivating Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[Doreen]

I know that delirium well. It bores deeper and deeper. This is different from the norm and I like it.

[E.H. Monroe]

just trying to find a meaning behind words that sometimes seem lost behind the words themselves. interesting idea
we go until we can't go no more

[Calypso]

Very bizarre if you don't mind me saying. Very good write.

[.]

wow ...loved it..the use of language is fab!!! I am a sucker for words and this certainly fills the brief beautifully..

[OT]

this is brilliant Margaret, I'm certainly one for words haha, so this naturally appeals to me, the rhymes are effortless and far from "easy rhymes" - well written, a nice old type feel to it! very nice!!

[Ashley Myers]

too many words that my little mind cannot grasp. ill get back at ya when i have a dictionary lol

[sarah]

Wonderful work!

[GamingGal]

Pros: Ah, another poem with beautiful wording! I'm absolutely adoring your use of older English with the "thy" and "thee" you use. It's a throwback to how poetry used to be written.

Cons: None.

Overall: Keep the olden style coming :)

[roarke]

That's pretty incredible. Heavy words, seamless rhythm, relevant rhyme, fearless write. Pretty incredible.