Oddly tuned

Something I wrote after a fight i had... Please let me know what you think. just simple short thing.

Cigarettes litter this earth

brittle to the touch

He says he cant overcome the guilt

She's yelling on the front porch

Scrubbing decay off your hands

screaming at fate for our late dance

where inside this paradox

 this cancerous parody 

become so forsaken such a parade 

such a vision! so plain. 

Pity filled eyes

lit up holes

covered in dirt 

to fill the void 

Last chance's strike twice

In essence a visage of vanity 

blandly recreating

oddly tuned

oddities 

I scream the words of a phantom 

Crafted words and smells

the spit of your voice

is light to a candle

your emotion is real

jealous and bottles of jack 

Author's Note

Please write something!! I want to become better!!

Reviews

[Faffy]

loving the imagery here! its like a short movie i could visualize it from beginning to the end. it is a little confusing in some part though but i think that's supposed to be the effect of it =P anyway i like it. keep up the good work!

oh i have just one question: what caused you to write this, what was your inspiration!