great climax, great printing choice, simple, perfect
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
I was a little iffy about my printing choice but thanks!
11 Years Ago
it definitely has an effect of its own. The silence in between vowels and consonants is as important.. read moreit definitely has an effect of its own. The silence in between vowels and consonants is as important as, and you used a visual method of creating that dramatic breath. kuddos
Wow I have so many different things that I got from this poem: it can literally be speaking about the couple enjoying a fine dinner together somewhere (except for the part about being stuffed away and frozen), it could be a hidden meaning of making love and then after such passion, the two move on with their lives and forget about each other as if what they had was "just like any other person they've been with" (being stuffed and frozen In the freezer) away from their memories and present lives, or it can be the beautiful moment of when love is so rich and full that it fills each person so much that they stay together and enjoy each other until the end and no matter the consequences (being stuffed and frozen together in a freezer) and being okay with it.
You may not have even thought that any of this is what someone would receive when finishing reading your poem, and that's totally fine, but it was so creative and wonderful that I personally couldn't just read it and have one single conclusion drawn.
Great write.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
wow, I honestly didn't catch onto the various meanings the last line can hold, I guess I was too stu.. read morewow, I honestly didn't catch onto the various meanings the last line can hold, I guess I was too stuck on my own perspective. Cool, thanks for the feedback!
To be frank, it isn't the kind of poetry I'd have gone after. I would have much rather sat in the existence of a woman dining with (on) her husband and making unrequited love.
Very fine poetry, although not my taste. Good job.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
I appreciate that you took your time to read this and thanks man!