DARKNESS

 

 

DARKNESS IS WITHIN ME.... DARKNESS IS ALL AROUND... I AM HERE INSIDE IT, DON'T YOU MAKE A SOUND!.... DARKNESS FILLS MY SENSES... TRYING TO DROWN MY MIND.... TRYING TO CHOKE MY SPIRIT... I HOPE THAT LIGHT... I MAY FIND.... AND ONCE INSIDE THE LIGHT, I'LL BE SURE TO STAY WITHIN IT... THE DARKNESS WILL DISSOLVE, WILL BE GONE, I WILL BE ABLE TO DISMISS IT!!...

Reviews

[MIDNIGHT ROSE]

FOR ALL THE READERS i FORGOT TO FINISH THE POEM DARKNESS IT ENDS THIS WAY:
THE DARKNESS WILL DISSOLVE, WILL BE GONE, i WILL BE ABLE TO DISMISS IT! SORRY ABOUT THAT AND THANKS FOR THE WONDERFUL REVIEWS!

[Forest Green]

Is this complete with 'will' ?

Wondering...I do find your poem compelling. Moving within the light is a nice inspiration...

Good work...

Daniel

[AmeliaRose]

i like this a lot, i like the flow and the whole don't make a sound part :) it was really cool with how you highlighted the text and everything. bravo

[Wicahpi]

"I AM HERE INSIDE IT, DON'T YOU MAKE A SOUND!...."

my favorite line...'shhhhhh'

nicely done. welcome to the writers cafe!

[Loribeth215]

You might want to put this on the "darkness" contest if you haven't already. Very good.