The Demon~

Susie Nightwind is just having a normal evening in her apartment, until she finds out a demon is in her presence...

            It is now 8:47 pm on October 25, 2010, and I am hearing faint whispers coming from my living room. I am Susie Nightwind, and I am currently taking my daily shower. This is when I heard the whispers coming from the floor below me. I couldn’t make out much, except for one very bone-chilling scentence: “Come out, come out, wherever you are, Susie…”  That’s when I stopped. I turned off the shower and got out to dry off. I searched for my clothes which were in a small bin in the bathroom and I threw them on quickly. After my clothes were on, I just sat on the wet floor as worries floated in my head. Was it my boyfriend and his other guy friends pulling a prank on me? Were they criminals who broke into my house? Were they murders? No. I knew exactly what it was. It was a demon. An evil spirit is living in my apartment.

            I got up of the floor and grabbed a comb. I started carefully combing my wet, tangled hair while looking in the mirror. Then to my surprise, a very tall demonic-looking man arose from behind me. His eyes were as black as night, he had sharp claws and teeth, a long, forked tongue hung from his mouth, and his skin was black and very dirty; almost like he had been underground. I froze in complete terror, and watched the hand arise above my head. Then he whispered a slow, “Don’t be afraid, Susie. It is only death you are about to face…” Then before the sharp claws dug through my head, I shut my eyes tight and screamed. When I opened my eyes, it was gone. I knew I had to get out of here. I burst through the door and into my bedroom to pack my things. When I walked in, I tried turning on the light, but the electricity was out cold. So, my only other choice was to leave empty handed.

            It is now 9:03 pm and I ran into the hallway and tried to make it to the stairs, but I couldn’t find them. So I had another plan. I sprinted down the hallway which almost seemed like it was getting longer as I kept going, and I saw shadows moving on the walls and many whispers of “You’re dead, Susie…” and “You won’t be here much longer, Susie..”  I stopped and looked behind me. There I saw it, racing toward me with blood-covered lips and teeth. I screamed again and ran as fast as I could into the next bedroom where a very large window was opened. Down below laid the great city of Chicago with much traffic on the streets. I looked back once more only to see it behind me getting ready to strike. So then, on the window ledge, I jumped.

            The fall seemed endless. I knew from the time I jumped that I was going to die that night; either from the demon or any other way. I closed my eyes and prayed one last prayer, until I was caught by a policeman. He started questioning me with “Why did you jump? Your apartment is about 15 stories high!” and all I could say was “Sir, you wouldn’t believe me if I told you the real, bloody truth.”

Author's Note

I used this for a school paper too, but yet I find that it would be a good story to share with the world...

Reviews

[Mara-J]

Thank you, and I know I could have done a better job. I did this a while ago.

[Shawn Killian]

its very good. Although you could have used better word chice and added detail, i still liked it. Its good.