EMBRACING THE CLOUD

Embracing the cloud

 

Broken are my shoes and my cape lost its color

Beneath the folds of my bandana is a constant shudder

 

Scattered inside my heart  are broken wings of butterflies

No more, no dreams will cut the edges of my eyes

 

Why I always reached out to prove that  it will be found

Knowing distinctively thoughts are louder than any other sound  

 

My pleadings returned as whispers unheard

Fallen apart  from the manuscript is this single word

 

The pillar of my strength  was always  a smoky cloud

I will embrace it and get covered in a towering shroud

 

Embracing the cloud to exit from the lineage and scores

Sailing through the creeks of emotions and missing concluding shores

 

Embracing the clouds to count mistakes of sleazy rainbow

Its past manipulations and those vivid color shows

 

Raked aspirations and repainted  destiny’s flow charts

Averted fates and deliberation  of  stark rebellious starts

 

Embracing the cloud to rekindle the life in its  innocence

Assessing its being as highest  in comparison to  its presence

 

…….By Manpreet Kaur Matharoo

© copyright Wed Dec 14 06:46:35 UTC 2011 - All Rights Reserved

Reviews

[Renny]

A master piece!

[Jack Isaac]

Very original write! Let's say, undiscovered territory. An intellectual jouney into recounting what went wrong --why be persuaded by fleeting rainbows, when one could have had a dependable cloud. Who sees the beauty in the clouds?

Very nice concept, flow would work better (if that's what you wanted) by selecting a few different words; like instinctively instead of distinctively.
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Knowing distinctively thoughts are louder than any other sound
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I really like they way this poem starts out basic an digs in deeper to the question. Nice write

[Robbie~xoxo~]

"Embracing the clouds to rekindle the life in its innocence"~ we are always trying to get back what once was... Nice write!

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

superb! the flow of tranquility and submission of thoughts.... thats wat i call poetry.... u av it...... Hats off!
P.S: these l9's touched me "Why I always reached out to prove that it will be found
Knowing distinctively thoughts are louder than any other sound "
personal fav.....

[Arielle Ann]

great flow....perfect rhythm...awesome rhyming and vocabulary....other than that I could really get what you wanted to say...its a mystery:)

[LunarSong]

I like it, I'm just curious what the 'this single word is'.

[Sakib]

Awesome!!!!!!!I liked it. A great write....

[Lively]

Nice, lovely...

[Becky C Strukamp]

A magnificent writing. Wonderful reading. This poem puts one at calm and you feel as though you are taking a ride on a cloud, enjoying the view, embracing life. Excellent!!