Wounded

If I could ease your pain, I would. If I could fix you, I would. I could even forgive you, I have. Mx

 

 

 

 

Wounded

 

Wash your hands my love,

The blood has dried and must be wiped away.

 

Wash your hands my love,

Let the wounds heal and with it any hurt.

 

Wash your hands my love,

Come to me and let me help you with your pain.

 

Wash your hands my love,

For my blood does not belong on your fists.

 

 

 

Author's Note

5th November 2008 - I am humbled that I won this competition today. Ironically, my writing has been validated in 2 ways, because I won a second competition today called "A day in the life" for a poem called "Underground Kisses". Underground Kisses is the day my demon and I first kissed, Wounded is how it ended and of course both are how I feel. Go read it.

A small contribution for Emilys 'All in our hands' competition, the key to my write being - describe the character of a person real or fictional by only describing their hands.

Reviews

[Susan M. Fenn]

Okay, not only should you SOOOO not be wanting to take away the pain and hurt of someone who did that, but you should pretend that you want to, and when they're fully in belief that you'll take their pain away and wash the blood off.... knock them a good one in the mouth!
It is a short poem, but babe, you hit it on the head.... GREAT JOB!

[Ed Hart]

poetry is art, poetry is catharsis, poetry is the muse-ic that we play...i'm glad you're one of us...ed

[Celtic Cat]

woahhhhhhhhhh.......... LOVE THIS! Each line sucked me in till the very clincher at the end!!!! Very, very nicely done!!!!!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Oh! This is so full of sorrow! I agree with Emily about inviting it for forgiveness but on the second thought I guess, sometimes �it's not also worth forgiving and it totally depends upon the circumstances as well as the individual.
For me, these lines outstands

Wash your hands my love,

Let the wounds heal and with it any hurt.

It is surely very deep but...sometimes it's impossible for any wound to heal...

The ending is just perfect and how exactly as a reader I wanted it to be.
This is really a great work, best of luck for the contest :)

[An Ordinary Woman]

Words to live by, Manoosh. Emily is right, invite it in and offer forgiveness. It is never easy but always worth it.

[Emily B]

oh, Manoosh, maybe that is the best way to exorcise a demon-- Invite it in and grant it forgiveness. These words seem to have a quiet, healing power. I am astounded by the depths of your words.