When

Written pre deletion day. October 2007. Sometimes we are just so very tired of it all.

When

 

When they fail you, what do you do?

You cope, you learn, you survive.

 

When the world fails you, what do you do?

You smile, you laugh, you fight.

 

When your body fails you, what do you do?

I ask, I beg, I wonder.

 

When you have given your strength away,

When you have nothing left,

When you have,

Just you,

Just.

 

Reviews

[Emily B]

I just felt exhausted at that last word. Like I had given everything I had just to get there. I would call that a highly effective write.

[Nick Erickson]

Lonliness, is what I felt when I finished. However, we never grow stronger unless we fail and no matter how bad someon has failed us, in the end, it's their loss. They loose a friend, a comfort and you have gained strength and understanding, belief in yourself, that you can overcome and do anything.
You are stronger than me, exposing yourself as you do. Well written.

[Fantasyfairy]

A sad poem. I feel the lonliness in this one. But if we can't rely on ourselves, then what hope is there? XX

[Phill Oz O'fee]

There is sad quietude to this composition, that appeals to the reader in a compassionate and constructive manner. I found a reflection of serenity about it that was almost prayer like!

It reminded me of the 'Serenity Prayer' (the common name for an originally untitled prayer written by the theologian Reinhold Niebuhr in the 1930s or early 1940s), which went something like this;

God, give us grace to accept with serenity the things that cannot be changed, courage to change the things that should be changed, and the wisdom to distinguish the one from the other.

Excellent write. Well done!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Jaclyn]

The abrupt ending reminds me of someone singing a song or pouring out their emotions to someone and not being able to finish because they have to choke back tears. I kind of would have liked to read more about these questions and answers, as they were valid and sad and thought-provoking. However, that is not to say I would change this poem, but I think you could go on with more of this. And it didn't feel like a ramble at all! :) Good one!

[Zane Mathias]

when you have given everything away you will always have us at writers cafe. well unless you giv up your computer. But anyway Great write.

[Shane Patrick]

exposed and another pondering question wellness is something we take for granted.. I hope there is rest for your future another wonderful work..

[Darryl Salach]

you got me baby!!!! I love your stuff and your openess....I hope you are smiling today my friend!!xo

[Bubo]

I felt sad reading this...........it speaks of disappointment, in people and your self..........and the end was so sorrowful, what do you do?
You remember what a strong beautiful woman you are, get up, and dust your knees down and keep
going, holding on to all the good in your life............hugs.