The Wind

Written July 2007, pre deletion day.

The Wind

 

A deep breath…. perspiration coats her body,

A gentle breeze…. caresses her imperfections,

A beating drum…. drowns her resistance,

A dominant force…. her body it yields.

 

How exquisite his virtual touch,

How powerful the storm ahead.

 

Reviews

[Shadkim]

Wonderful imagery - I can picture this in my head. My favorite line is:

"A gentle breeze... caresses her imperfections."

I wouldn't have thought of that. ^^ Very good!

[Crystal L. Test]

Breathtaking was the first word that came to mind. Great imagery and powerful visuals in so few words.

[Zane Mathias]

This is a very powerful poem. very symbolic and true. ( I hope i used the right word its Early). once again Never a wast of time reading your writes. :)

[The Random Writings Of ..]

This piece has a build up, nicely done.
How exquisite his virtual touch,
How powerful the storm ahead.
Very powerful end, Thank you
xoxo
Kates

[Julian]

A gradual building.... "A gentle breeze" preparing the way for that storm. I like how you managed to convey the "building up" in so few words. Enjoyed this. Julian

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Nice to read more of your strength without the angst but with a feeling of love in this piece instead. Short but strong and elegant. Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[Sianna Reader]

Wow, what an amazing poem! and I lov the third line, quite charming!

[Crazy Cat Man]

:)

[Zane Mathias]

short and sweet and to the point i like.

[H. A. M.]

"A deep breath� perspiration coats her body, " That's the best visual I've had in a long time. I like the way this goes. It's uncomplex and it still delivers the goods. Nice one!