The Forgotten

Written July 2007, pre deletion day.

The Forgotten

She is standing,
Can you see her?
I am not invisible.

She is talking,
Can you hear her?
Acknowledge my voice.

She is fighting,
Can you feel her?
Fear my strength.

She is naked,
Can you taste her?
I am no longer yours.

She is resilient,
Can you break her?
Not I, not now, not f*****g ever.

 

 

Reviews

[Crystal L. Test]

I agree with everyone here that this is a quietly powerful piece. There is not outright anger being portrayed but a message to let this person know that you will no longer be trampled on by them. Very successful. Thanks for sharing.

[Noel]

That which does not kill us makes us stronger...

She is resilient,
Can you break her?
Not I, not now, not f*****g ever.

That's my fave and I can relate to that emotion very deeply. A great piece - few words and great punch! I love it!

[Sianna Reader]

Wow, a strong message and a great poem, I love to read peoples poems and learn from them, hopefully to improve my own. Manoosh this is such a powerful and the stanza's were great!

She is talking,
Can you hear her?
Acknowledge my voice.

My Ultimate favourite stanza! Great job! xxx

[Darryl Salach]

this is wonderful Manoosh!! Your message is percise and to the point...you have said a lot here in a very few lines...the last line is powerful!! Well done!!

[H. A. M.]

"She is fighting,
Can you feel her?
Fear my strength." Not the big sounding sound of rage and anger but it comes off quietly defiant. Like a peaceful warrior so to speak. I like that. Good one.

[Gandré]

She is naked,
Can you taste her?
I am no longer yours. ------this is my favorite stanza. It says more than the 3 lines.

a strong message to the reader. it says to me something about the game the great cat and mouse game weaving together the perspectives 3rd person singular and 1st person singular. i liked it, thanks for sending it to me.

[Bubo]

Strenght behind this........won't be walked on anymore........
Strong words indeed..............

She is naked,
Can you taste her?
I am no longer yours.

Loved this!!

[James K. Blaylock]

to me this seems to be speaking of a person who was not appreciated. and who has moved on to a place were they now are. leaving the others in their life to only have those ghostly memories of that person remaining behind.

[Shane Patrick]

touch of a ghost.. or a memory.. I see in this and nothing in this will be forgotten my friend... another beautiful piece...

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Wow - very powerful. Stand up for yourself and you have done that here. Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha